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The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The he table and charts below give nformation on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. I'he table shows where the money came From and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main Features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table and pie charts
illustrates
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 the data on the police budget for
year
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the year
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 2017 and 2018 in
specific
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a specific
the specific
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area
 of
united
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the united
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 kingdom.
In which
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, table present where the
money
 came from and the pie
chatrs
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charts
 show how it was distributed in
varies
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various
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area
.
overall
, it can be seen clearly that
income
 and revenue of
money
was
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 divided
in
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into
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 three different
area
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areas
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. In which, source of
income
 was increased as compared to
previous
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the previous
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year
 in each sector.
However
,
highest
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the most
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money
 was spent
in
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on
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salaries
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the salaries
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 of officers and staff as
compare
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compared
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 lowest budget for building and transport.
According to
table chat
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Table Chat
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, in 2017,
total
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a total
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 amount of 304.7 £m was received as
a
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apply
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income
in
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of
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 which
National
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the National
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 Government
have
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made
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 a major contribution
around
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of around
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 175.5 £m. In 2018,
this
 figure was reached in 177.8
£m
.
As a
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A
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 same, in 2017,
area
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the area
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 of local Taxes
were contributing
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contributed
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 91.2 £m and in
next
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the next
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year
 around 10 m increment and
this
 amount rose
at
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to
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 102.3 £m.
as
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In
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contrasts
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, other sources like grants
income
 have minimal only 0.5 £m changed around the
year
 and final amount was 38.5 £m.
Besides
, around the
quter
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quarter
 of part was used in salaries of officers and staff, respectively 75 % in 2017 and 69 % in 218.
Although
,
same
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the same
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 number of
figuers
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figures
 in building and transports that was 17 %.
Furthermore
, in 2017,
money
 was spent in
technology
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the technology
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 sector
8
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by 8
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% but
this
 number was double in
next
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the next
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year
around
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by around
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 14%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, area, money, income, £m with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 5 times.
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