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The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process for recycling plastic bottles. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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diagram detailed above delineates how plastic bottles are recycled. Looking from an
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 perspective it is readily apparent that it is a circular process comprised of 9 steps, including from collecting to the end products on market shelves.
Initially
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, the plastic thrown in designated recycling bins is loaded into specific garbage trucks,
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taken to the recycling centre. Once there, the bottles are first sorted by hand and next compressed into blocks.
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 is followed by a passage through a crushing machine and conversion into small pieces prior to cleaning them up. After being crushed and washed, the plastic bits are poured into a pellet machine and
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 healed in order to become a raw material, which can originate a range of new products.
To sum up
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, domestic rubbish has been reconstituted in a novel material,
such
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 as containers, bags and even bottles, which can be recycled again for
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Recycling process
  • Disposal
  • Collection
  • Sorting
  • Cleaning
  • Contaminants
  • Recycling center
  • Plastic flakes
  • Melting
  • Re-shaping
  • Raw materials
  • Transformation
  • Repurposing
  • End products
  • Variety
  • Sustainability
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