The first chart illustrates the proportion of residents possessing computer from 2002 to 2010. The second bar chart compares the percentage of people who owned computer by level of their education between 2002 and 2010.

The first chart illustrates the proportion of residents possessing computer from 2002 to 2010. The second bar chart compares the percentage of people who owned computer by level of their education between 2002 and 2010.
The first chart illustrates the proportion of residents possessing
computer
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computers
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from 2002 to 2010. The second bar chart compares the percentage of people who owned
computer
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computers
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by
level
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the level
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of their education between 2002 and 2010.
Overall
,
computer
ownership
rose constantly over the period, with people with higher levels of education having higher levels of
computer
ownership
. Taking a closer look at the data,
computer
ownership
amongst the whole population stood at around 50% in 2002, and
this
figure rose gradually by roughly 5% each year to reach approximately 75% in 2010. Throughout the period, those with higher levels of education were more likely to own a
computer
. Those with postgraduate qualifications, bachelor’s degrees and college qualifications had rates of
computer
ownership
at roughly 75%, 70% and 55% in 2002, respectively, revealing a clear correlation between qualifications and
computer
ownership
. By 2010, rates of
ownership
had increased by similar amounts for these three groups to around 95%, 90% and 87%, respectively.
In contrast
, high school graduates and those without a
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diploma started the period with much lower rates, at 38% and 18%, but these percentages increased dramatically to reach 70% and 45% in 2010, respectively.
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