The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
The diagrams above
illustrated
a museum's Wrong verb form
illustrate
floor
plan development in 2008
-2012 period.
Correct article usage
the 2008
Overall
, there was
changes in the museum Change the verb form
were
floor
layout as there was more floor
and rooms provided. Another significant changes
was the stairs replaced by lift in 2012.
In 2008, only two floors Replace the adjective
change
constructed
in museums with limited spaces for Add a missing verb
were constructed
people
Change noun form
people's
activites
. Correct your spelling
activities
In
the first Change preposition
On
floor
, visitors could explore several rooms such
as gallery
, shop and Add an article
the gallery
a gallery
cloak
Correct your spelling
cloakroom
room
. People moving to second
Add an article
the second
floor
using stairs where reception and reading room
available. People
entrance Change noun form
People's
also
located Add a missing verb
was also
in
the second Change preposition
on
floor
which
they arrived in Correct word choice
where
reception
Add an article
the reception
a reception
room
.
In 2012, several major changes happened to the museum plan as there is
more Wrong verb form
was
room
and new
elevator facility. The Correct article usage
a new
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
room
increased which align with the Add an article
the room
floor
levels
addition, in total there Change the noun form
level
was
4 floors. Several new rooms are Change the verb form
were
children's
play area, entrance hall, restaurant, terrace, self-service cafe and exhibition Correct article usage
a children's
room
. An elevator also
added Add a missing verb
was also
into
the building, moving visitors from Change preposition
to
first
to Correct article usage
the first
fourth
Add an article
the fourth
floor
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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