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The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.

The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
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The diagrams above
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrate
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 a museum's
floor
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 plan development in
2008
Correct article usage
the 2008
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-2012 period.
Overall
Linking Words
, there
was
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were
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 changes in the museum
floor
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 layout as there was more
floor
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 and rooms provided. Another significant
changes
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change
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 was the stairs replaced by lift in 2012. In 2008, only two floors
constructed
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were constructed
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 in museums with limited spaces for
people
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people's
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activites
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activities
.
In
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On
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 the first
floor
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, visitors could explore several rooms
such
Linking Words
 as
gallery
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the gallery
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, shop and
cloak
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cloakroom
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room
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. People moving to
second
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the second
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floor
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 using stairs where reception and reading
room
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 available.
People
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People's
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 entrance
Linking Words
also
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was also
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 located
in
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on
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 the second
floor
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which
Correct word choice
where
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 they arrived in
reception
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the reception
a reception
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room
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. In 2012, several major changes happened to the museum plan as there
is
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was
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 more
room
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 and
new
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a new
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 elevator facility. The
numbers
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number
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 of
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room
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the room
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 increased which align with the
floor
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levels
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level
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 addition, in total there
was
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were
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 4 floors. Several new rooms are
children's
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a children's
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 play area, entrance hall, restaurant, terrace, self-service cafe and exhibition
room
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. An elevator
Linking Words
also
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was also
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 added
into
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to
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 the building, moving visitors from
first
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the first
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 to
fourth
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the fourth
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floor
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Floor plan
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Spatial distribution
  • Accessibility
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit
  • Gallery
  • Interactive displays
  • Historical artifacts
  • Educational facilities
  • Visitor amenities
  • Foot traffic
  • Layout alteration
  • Modernize
  • Gift shop
  • Cafeteria
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