The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.

The two diagrams below describe changes to a museum's floor plan between 2008 and 2012.
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The diagrams above
illustrated
Wrong verb form
illustrate

It appears that your sentence or clause uses an incorrect form of the verb illustrated. Consider changing it.

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a museum's
floor
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plan development in
2008
Correct article usage
the 2008

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-2012 period.
Overall
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, there
was
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were

The singular verb form was does not seem to agree with the plural subject changes in the museum floor layout. Consider changing the verb form.

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changes in the museum
floor
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layout as there was more
floor
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and rooms provided. Another significant
changes
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change

The adjective another appears to be modifying the plural noun changes. Consider replacing it with the adjective other.

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was the stairs replaced by lift in 2012. In 2008, only two floors
constructed
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were constructed

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in museums with limited spaces for
people
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people's

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activites
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activities

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.
In
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On

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the first
floor
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, visitors could explore several rooms
such
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as
gallery
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the gallery
a gallery

The noun phrase gallery seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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, shop and
cloak
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cloakroom

The word cloak room seems to be miswritten. Consider replacing it.

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room
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. People moving to
second
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the second

The noun phrase second floor seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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floor
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using stairs where reception and reading
room
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available.
People
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People's

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entrance
Linking Words
Linking Words
also
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was also

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located
in
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on

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the second
floor
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which
Correct word choice
where

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they arrived in
reception
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the reception
a reception

The noun phrase reception room seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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room
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. In 2012, several major changes happened to the museum plan as there
is
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was

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more
room
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and
new
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a new

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elevator facility. The
numbers
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number

It seems that numbers may not agree in number with other words in this phrase.

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of
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Use synonyms
room
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the room

The noun phrase room seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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increased which align with the
floor
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levels
Change the noun form
level

Your sentence appears to use the incorrect form of levels. Consider changing it to singular.

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addition, in total there
was
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were

The singular verb form was does not seem to agree with the plural subject 4 floors. Consider changing the verb form.

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4 floors. Several new rooms are
children's
Correct article usage
a children's

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play area, entrance hall, restaurant, terrace, self-service cafe and exhibition
room
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. An elevator
Linking Words
Linking Words
also
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was also

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added
into
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to

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the building, moving visitors from
first
Correct article usage
the first

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to
fourth
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the fourth

The noun phrase fourth floor seems to be missing a determiner before it. Consider adding an article.

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floor
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It is important to use synonyms in your writing, as you will lose marks if you repeat words from the question and use the same words in your essay over and over. If you do that, it will show the examiner that you have a limited vocabulary and you want to do the opposite for a high band score.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, room with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Floor plan
  • Renovation
  • Expansion
  • Spatial distribution
  • Accessibility
  • Visitor experience
  • Exhibit
  • Gallery
  • Interactive displays
  • Historical artifacts
  • Educational facilities
  • Visitor amenities
  • Foot traffic
  • Layout alteration
  • Modernize
  • Gift shop
  • Cafeteria
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