The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.
The bar chart illustrates how much
time
expenditure
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was spent
in
some recreational pursuits by men and women in a given place in 2019.
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Overall
, the amount of time
spent on reading books was the highest in Chinese and American tourists
, while
in Turkey and Brazil
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Brazil,
tourists
spent time
at the beach the most. It is also
notable that the figure of
visiting places in all given Change preposition
for
town
was the lowest.
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towns
Firstly
, the amount of time
Chinese tourists
spent on reading books was the largest, at 8 hours
, which was nearly thrice as much as at the beach with 3 hours
and only 1 hours
for visiting places. American Change to a singular noun
hour
tourists
' have the same trend as Chinese, at 5,4 and 3 hours
, respectively.
Secondly
, about 6 hours
were spent by Brazilian tourists
at the beach, compared to less than 1 hour of
Turkish Change preposition
for
tourists
and also
followed by the same amount of time
in both Turkish and Brazilian at 4 hours
. The figure of
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for
time
expenditure in visiting places by Turkish and Brazilian tourists
was the shortest with 3 hours
and 2 hours
, respectively.Submitted by dinhtrungkien285 on
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