The bar chart below illustrates the amount of time spent on various leisure activities by men and women in a given town in 2019.
The bar chart illustrates how much
time
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expenditure
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was spent
in
some recreational pursuits by men and women in a given place in 2019.
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on
Overall
, the amount of Linking Words
time
spent on reading books was the highest in Chinese and American Use synonyms
tourists
, Use synonyms
while
in Turkey and Linking Words
Brazil
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Brazil,
tourists
spent Use synonyms
time
at the beach the most. It is Use synonyms
also
notable that the figure Linking Words
of
visiting places in all given Change preposition
for
town
was the lowest.
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towns
Firstly
, the amount of Linking Words
time
Chinese Use synonyms
tourists
spent on reading books was the largest, at 8 Use synonyms
hours
, which was nearly thrice as much as at the beach with 3 Use synonyms
hours
and only 1 Use synonyms
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hours
for visiting places. American Change to a singular noun
hour
tourists
' have the same trend as Chinese, at 5,4 and 3 Use synonyms
hours
, respectively.
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Secondly
, about 6 Linking Words
hours
were spent by Brazilian Use synonyms
tourists
at the beach, compared to less than 1 hour Use synonyms
of
Turkish Change preposition
for
tourists
and Use synonyms
also
followed by the same amount of Linking Words
time
in both Turkish and Brazilian at 4 Use synonyms
hours
. The figure Use synonyms
of
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for
time
expenditure in visiting places by Turkish and Brazilian Use synonyms
tourists
was the shortest with 3 Use synonyms
hours
and 2 Use synonyms
hours
, respectively.Use synonyms
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