The charts below show each grade level’s activity and the total revenue gained from it, by percentage, from King Primary School’s recent fundraising event. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie chart displays data about total funding treasured by 6 different class

level

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at King Primary

School's

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Schools

School

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Overall

, the highest contributor is the first

grade

while

the third

grade

gives

least

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money for the school event. The highest percentage of school event donations

is come

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from the first

grade

with 23.7%, followed by second

grade

with 20.9% and fifth

grade

with 18.3% respectively. Those three grades

contributes

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more than 60% of total revenue gained. The

least

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lowest

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proportion

is come

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comes

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from third

grade

with 7.8%, followed by fourth

grade

with 13.9% and sixth

grade

with 15.5% respectively.

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