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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Technology has made children less creative than they were in the past.

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I agree with the opinion that
children
's
creativity
 is
decling
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declining
 compared to the past
due to
 the advancement of
technology
. 　
First,
technology
, especially digital devices
such
 as smartphones and tablets, often come with a wealth of ready-made entertainment options.The abundance
ot
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of
such
 ready-made content may reduce the need for
children
 to use their imagination.
For example
,you may have created your own games and stories in the past,but now you may have a stronger tendency to passively consume what is projected on the screen.
Such
 passive consumption may hinder the development of imagination and thinking power. 　
Secondly
, the
immidiate
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immediate
 satisfaction and solutions provided by
technology
 can impair the patience needed to think.
Children
 who grew up in a technologically developed environment may soon get used to getting answers and may not be able to think deeply and creatively about the problem.The process of exploration and discovery，
whch
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which
 is important for
creativity
,is simplified by
technology
.Another point is that
technology
,especially social media,creates
great
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environment where
children
 feel pressured to conform to certain standards and trends.
This
 suppresses individual
creativity
 and prevents them from exploring unique and unconventional ideas.
Finally
,overuse of
technology
 tends to a decrease in physical activity,which is important for the development of
creativity
.Activities that directly interact with the physical world,
such
 as playing outside,stimulate imagination and
creativity
. As you spend more time using the screen,these beneficial experiences often decrease. In conclusion,
while
technology
 has many advantages,there are concerns that it will reduce
children
's
creativity
.
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 characteristics include a change from active engagement.To passive engagement,ease of access to information,peer pressure,and a decrease in physical experience.
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