The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.

The chart and table below give information about healthcare resources and life expectancy in different countries.
The bar chart depicts the number of places in hospitals in 8 countries and the table shows
expenses
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the expenses
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of Japan, the
Netherlands
and the US in the health sector and the average expectations of life.
According to
the bar chart, coating takes a leading position in
quality
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the quality
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of hospital beds with 14 places per thousand
of
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people. Equating to 8 cot, Germany takes the second position, forming a significant gap with six other countries
which
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whose
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number of hospital places varies from 3 to 5 per thousand of population. Probing
further
to the table, it becomes obvious that US health
spendings
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spending
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are
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is
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nearly twice as much as
Netherlands
expenses with 6,719$ and 3,481$ respectively. Despite the fact that only 2,581$ are directed into medicine which is the smallest sum of money among the three countries, the life expectancy of the Japanese reaches 83 years which overtakes both the
Netherlands
and the US where
average
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the average
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lifespan does not exceed 80 and 78 years.
Overall
, Japan with the smallest financial resources that are spent on one person provides more hospital beds and shows remarkably better average life expectancy than
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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and
US
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the US
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do
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. As opposed to Japan,
spendings
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spending
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in the US is far more,
however
, it does not positively affect the number of years that people live and the quality of hospital beds positively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • healthcare resources
  • life expectancy
  • per capita
  • modern medical equipment
  • correlate
  • accessibility
  • average lifespan
  • healthcare policies
  • government healthcare spending
  • disparities
  • developed countries
  • developing countries
  • global health inequalities
  • technological advancements
  • telemedicine
  • AI diagnostics
  • health outcomes
  • public health initiatives
  • vaccination programs
  • preventive healthcare
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