The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean.

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The diagram shows the information about the Hawaiian

Island

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chain

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which is located in the middle of the Pacific Ocean.

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Hawaii

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have

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8 major

island

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and many little

islands

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which are circled by water.

Hawaiian

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The Hawaiian

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Islands

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is a popular tourist destination. It's because of the many volcanos located under the

chain

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. The oldest

volcano

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existing

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existed

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since

first

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the first

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human

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humans

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have

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apply

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stepped

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onto

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the

island

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. Eruption processing in the bottom of the solid dense rock, at 2883 kilometres underground. The 'hot spot' spume located upside of the erupting zone remains static and doesn't move. Magma

spuma

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stands even higher, but lower than

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volcano

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a volcano

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the Pacific plate. The edge of the

volcano

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is located at one of the

islands

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in the

Hawaii

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island

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chain

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and

built

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up by numerous eruptions. There are thousands of

islands

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in the Pacific.

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many other

islands

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Hawaii

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was 'born' when two

litospheric

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lithospheric

plates crashed into each other.

Islands

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named by the names of great ancient mythologic Gods: Niihau,

Kaual

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Kauai

, Oahu,

Molokaim

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Molokai

Lanai, Kahoolawe and Maui. The

chain

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named

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by the name of the biggest and southern

island

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called

Hawaii

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. In conclusion,

diagram

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the diagram

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is a great way to observe the history of

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volcano

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volcanoes

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the bottom of the ocean and

Hawaii

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islands

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, because it includes all

necessary

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the necessary

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information and data.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, chain, hawaii, islands, volcano with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

215 words

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The diagram below gives the information about the Hawaiian island chain in the centre of the Pacific Ocean.

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You have lost your student identification card. This has created some problems for you. Write a letter to the director of student services. In your letter advise them of your situation explain how this is affecting you request a new card You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Countries with a long average working time are more economically successful, but they are also likely to suffer from negative social consequences. To what extent do you agree or disagree?