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Some people think that air travel should be restricted because it causes environment pollution. How far do you agree or disagree?

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growing
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of
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numbers
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number
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 of
air
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travel
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, it is becoming
more
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a more
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 popular opinion that
air
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travel
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 should be restricted in order to
minimising
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 the effect on
pullution
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pollution
. I totally disagree with
this
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 opinion despite the
affect
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 of
planes
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 on
environment
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the environment
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. First and foremost,
air
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travel
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 is considered
as
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the best way of transportation. It is
because
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 the comfort and speed, which gives
planes
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. Not only
people
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,
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 but any
kinds
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kind
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 of products/
neccessities
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necessities
 can be delivered with the help of
planes
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.
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, if
human
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a human
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 needs an organ urgently, the fastest way of transporting is
air
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travel
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. If
people
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, thinking about the causes of pollution, choose another mode of transport
instead
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 of
air
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,
this
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 could end tragically.
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,
it
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there
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 could be other ways of fighting
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pollution, like creating eco-friendly
planes
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. In my opinion, it is the best solution that
people
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 can make in
this
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 situation. Because
,
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 scientists already created cars which
works
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 with electricity. If
this
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 method can be used in
air
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factory
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factories
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,
people
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 can minimise the
affect
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effect
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. In fact, over the past 5 years, the impact of cars on
air
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 pollution has decreased by 25%, and it's not over yet. In conclusion,
people
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 should focus on how to change the industry of
planes
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 in order to
making
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make
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 them eco-friendly,
instead
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 of just restricting them. It could be, more profitable for both sides.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Ensure your introduction and conclusion are clearly identifiable. The introduction should set the context and your thesis statement, and the conclusion should summarize your main points without introducing new ideas.
coherence cohesion
Support your main points with specific examples or explanations to strengthen your argument. Vague statements can weaken the perceived quality and depth of your essay.
task achievement
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task achievement
Develop clear and comprehensive ideas throughout your essay. Each paragraph should represent a distinct and well-explained perspective, contributing to the overall argument in your essay.
task achievement
Use relevant and specific examples to support your assertions. This helps in demonstrating to the examiner that you understand the topic at hand and can apply your knowledge accurately to support your ideas.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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