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more students study abroad to learn new things today do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages？ is it positive or negative？agree or disagree to what extent do you agree or disagree？

#students #study #disadvantages？ #negative？agree #disagree？
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Whether
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 is the best measure of
intelligence
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 has always been a matter of debate, and is now even more controversial with many
people
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 claiming it is useful
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 others reject the idea. The significant impact of
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 trend has sparked debate about the potential impact in recent years. In my opinion, the
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 proposal seems more rational.
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 article will explain my views on
favoring
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 positive affect and
thus
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 lead to a logical conclusion. Analyzing the statement and clarifying
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, the first and most important reason behind
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 is that it is not necessary to be smart To become successful. Another striking benefit in
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 regard is that
success
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 is not limited to
intelligence
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 alone. Discussing the matter categorically, it cannot be ignored that the main reason behind
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 is
success
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. Looking to the future, one of the main reasons stems from the fact that
intelligence
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 is not the only thing that creates
success
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. Moving forward, it should be noted that you can achieve
success
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 through repetitive work and a structured routine.
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, every human being has a certain
intelligence
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. Many
people
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 are smart in certain departments, and many
people
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 are smart in time management or repetitive tasks.
People
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 are not in one category. Regardless of the
reason
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 mentioned above, it can clearly be said that many are against or supporting
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 trend. In conclusion of the above-mentioned arguments, one can reach the essence
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 the benefits of achieving
success
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 in countless ways. You can be successful in your work, or you can be successful in your life and communication with others, or you can be successful in organizing your tasks and managing time, and
success
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 is too great to ignore
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Introduction
Ensure that the introduction has a clear thesis statement that addresses the essay question directly. Your introduction should clearly state whether you believe success is or is not the best measure of intelligence.
Body Paragraphs
Main body paragraphs must have clear topic sentences that relate directly to the essay question. Expand on your ideas with specific details and examples to support your points.
Conclusion
The conclusion should succinctly summarize your main points and restate your position on the topic. It should be clear and leave no doubt about your stance on the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use a range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas and paragraphs cohesively. Avoid repetition and strive for variety to show a flexible range of linking devices.
Task Achievement
Your essay must address all parts of the task. Ensure that you have responded completely to the prompt, including whether you think advantages outweigh disadvantages, and whether it is a positive or negative development.
Supporting Examples
Provide clear, relevant, and specific examples that are directly linked to your main points. These examples should support your argument and not be too general or off-topic.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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