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As computers translate quickly and accurately, learning foreign languages is a waste of time. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, there are more and more applications that can help people translate foreign
languages
 into the
languages
 they know.These applications can not only translate but
also
 be quicker and more accurate.
However
, some people think that learning foreign
languages
 is a waste of time. I do not agree with
this
 statement, for the following reasons.
Firstly
, learning foreign
languages
 can deeply know other cultures and histories. Take me a example, I majored in German at university,
I
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have various knowledge of German,
such
 as movies, and the life of locals.
In addition
, learning foreign
languages
 can present the respect for the locals.
For instance
, when I went to Switzerland, I used German to communicate with the locals. Because I spoke their
languages
 in their country, they treated me more kindly.
Secondly
, there are a lot of small
languages
are
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 going extinct. Learning foreign
languages
 can prevent these
languages
 being disappearing.
For instance
, the number of users of Min-Nan
languages
 in my country, Taiwan, has declined gradually.
As a result
in
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, the elders and experts are worried about the extinction of these
languages
 in the future. In conclusion,
as
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 globalisation, learning other
languages
 is important and easier.
Although
 computer science can assist individuals to translate more
easier
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 and more accurately.
However
, I still believe that learning foreign
languages
 is essential and valuable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Computers are proficient in certain domains but struggle with complex language nuances
  • Machine translation lacks human touch and may not capture context accurately
  • Learning a foreign language is a valuable investment in personal development
  • Language learning fosters empathy and appreciation for different cultures
  • Multilingual individuals are in high demand in the job market
  • Acquiring new languages expands one's horizons and opens doors to new opportunities
  • Bilingualism enhances cognitive flexibility and problem-solving abilities
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