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Describe the advantages and disadvantages of living in a small community

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From my point of view, living in a small community always has upsides and downsides. I believe there are two main advantages.
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I can find ways easily.
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 month, I had to discover the way to my teacher's house , at
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thought it would be difficult to find out but when I used Google
Map
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, it didn't have many roads so I just needed to follow the map once to get the house.
Second,
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small
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 town has great security and more private space. My neighborhood has never had any thefts and there is some vacant
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 around so it will be hard for others to see into my house. I think there is only one disadvantage, which is about education. I constantly read statistics of the scores of the national high school graduation exam of candidates in a lot of cities and I can see that the majority of candidates from large cities have higher marks. In brief, living in a small community is terrific,
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, we
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 have to expand and absorb new knowledge from other places.
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introduction conclusion present
Be sure to provide a clear introduction that explicitly states the advantages and disadvantages. The conclusion also needs to clearly summarize the points made.
logical structure
Organize your ideas into clear and logical paragraphs. Each paragraph should have a single focus and be linked to the overall theme of the essay.
supported main points
Support your main points with specific examples or evidence. Avoid general statements that do not substantiate the points being made.
complete response
Ensure that you fully respond to all parts of the task. Expand on your ideas to demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
clear comprehensive ideas
Develop your ideas fully to articulate clear and comprehensive ideas. Explain your reasoning and how these ideas relate to the topic.
relevant specific examples
Include relevant and specific examples to support your arguments. Try to use detailed evidence rather than general or vague references.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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