Tourism is one of the fastest growing industries and contributes a great deal to economies around the world. However, the damage tourism can cause to local cultures and the environment is often ignored. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

In recent years, tourism
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believed to be one of the most developing industries and
contribute
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much to economies all over the world.
However
, its damage can affect
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local features and
environment
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the environment
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is overlooked
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. Personally, I totally agree with the view above.
To begin
with, on the
culture
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front, the flow of visitors coming to a particular place can erode its local features and traditions. To explain, when the number of
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is considerably rising, their demand
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cultural experience are
also
highly growing, and they need to be required by local
local
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people. Because of
this
, it may result in the
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in local features.
For example
, in recent years in Vietnam, some of the tourist destinations which have several traditional activities turned into organizing other modern activities
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suitable with visitors, so
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lost
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traditional nature
gradually
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.
Moreover
, apart from the local cultures, the environment is
also
affected;
however
, it is ignored by most
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individual
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. With a great number of visitors coming to, some popular attractions face up to the dilemma of the dilution in
sighseeings
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sightseeings
sightseeing
, the environmental pollution by the mountains of litter,
ect
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etc
.
For instance
, the historic site that draws tourists, like Hung Temple is suffering from
the
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habitat destruction,
rubbish
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issue
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due to
the sheer volume of people going
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in
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occasion. In conclusion,
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tourist industries are one of the most developing aspects and help increase income
soures
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sources
, the eco-system is overlooked. In my point of view, I strictly agree with
this
view.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural dilution
  • Environmental degradation
  • Responsible tourism
  • Ecotourism
  • Cultural conservation
  • Habitat destruction
  • Sustainable practices
  • Cultural exchange
  • Commercialization of cultural sites
  • Cultural heritage
  • Local ecosystems
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