The graph below shows the percentage of people by age group visiting the cinema at least once per month in one particular country between 1978 and 2008. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the percentages of attending the theatre with a range of age
group
in Australia from 1978 to 2008.
It is clear from the graph, the Fix the agreement mistake
groups
group
of 14 – 24 years
old visited the cinema more frequently than the rest and reached to
the top 92% in 1978 . Change preposition
apply
However
, the over
trend of the Correct word choice
overall
group
was to remain steadily around 90%. Contrastingly, there was an upward movement in the oldest group
from 30% to 50% between 1988 and 1998. In the mean time
, Correct your spelling
meantime
comparing
with the younger groups, the over 50 Wrong verb form
compared
years
old group
is
less movie attendance in the whole period.
In 1998, the middle age groups started at the same point Verb problem
had
is
30% and 50% after that they increased slowly until 2003. Unnecessary verb
apply
However
the 50+ years
old kept rising and got a peak at 52 % in 2008. Meanwhile, the 25-34 years
old group
and the 35-49 years
old group
began decreasing gradually from 2003 and down to 68% in 2008.Submitted by 1244355479 on
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