Some people say that the best way to teach children to behave well is to punish them. Others argue that rewarding and praising children is a better way to teach them the difference betweeen right and wrong. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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children
while
others tried
to make them understand without Wrong verb form
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punishment
. This
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opinion
because, sometimes we need to punish for Fix the agreement mistake
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is one
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children
doing
bad things we need correct them, in most Wrong verb form
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cases,
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punishment
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Therefore
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them realise the mistake.
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On the other hand
, giving reward
to Correct article usage
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child
for his bad behaviour is not good. Correct article usage
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Therefore
, in this
situation
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situation,
in
next time.
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children
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