Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do benefits of this outweigh the drawbackss?
Nowadays, studying at colleges and universities arranged far away from growing up places has become a trend among many
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This
essay will argue that the drawbacks of this
overtake the advantages. The following paragraph will first demonstrate that by leaving the native place pupils learn to be accountable for their lives and that it brings personal problems such
as lack of sphere time, working and studying at the same time, which results in bad quality of discipline.
The main reason to go off from their hometown is the freedom they couldn't get by living with their parents. That's to say that they will be able to do whatever they can, whenever they want, as long as it's legal. For example
, hanging out with friends until night and partying won't be banned. All the choices will be decided by themselves and the consequences will be reflected in their future.
Those opposed to this
say it causes the loss of high marks and quality of discipline. Mostly
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Most
admission
tend to waste money so to have enough them they work after lessons. To illustrate, Fix the agreement mistake
admissions
according to
recent articles, two thirds
of Add a hyphen
two-thirds
undergraduate
have part-time jobs.Every year, about 15 per cent of freshmen are expelled and go home. Fix the agreement mistake
undergraduates
This
shows that without help from the parents
side, it's extremely hard to adapt Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
an
unfamiliar city and get a higher education or college degree.
On balance, the fact that studying abroad Change preposition
to an
of
their city leads to losing concentration and focus from education clearly doesn't outweigh the flawed argument that many students prefer to study far away from their hometown.Change preposition
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