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Many students choose to study at colleges and universities that are far away from the places where they grew up. Do benefits of this outweigh the drawbackss?

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Nowadays, studying at colleges and universities arranged far away from growing up places has become a trend among many
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This
 essay will argue that the drawbacks of
this
 overtake the advantages. The following paragraph will first demonstrate that by leaving the native place pupils learn to be accountable for their lives and that it brings personal problems
such
 as lack of sphere time, working and studying at the same time, which results in bad quality of discipline. The main reason to go off from their hometown is the freedom they couldn't get by living with their parents. That's to say that they will be able to do whatever they can, whenever they want, as long as it's legal.
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, hanging out with friends until night and partying won't be banned. All the choices will be decided by themselves and the consequences will be reflected in their future. Those opposed to
this
 say it causes the loss of high marks and quality of discipline.
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 tend to waste money so to have enough them they work after lessons. To illustrate,
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 of
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 have part-time jobs.Every year, about 15 per cent of freshmen are expelled and go home.
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 shows that without help from the
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 side, it's extremely hard to adapt
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 unfamiliar city and get a higher education or college degree. On balance, the fact that studying abroad
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 their city leads to losing concentration and focus from education clearly doesn't outweigh the flawed argument that many students prefer to study far away from their hometown.
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