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Band 4.5

write a letter for a company offering job

Good
mornig
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morning
, Ammy! I hope you are doing well since the
last
Linking Words
 time we talked. I'm writing
you
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to you
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 regarding our previous conversation. The immigration consultant did not get in touch yet, could you check with them if everything is ok? I'm in contact with an immigration company here in Brazil, and they told me that I already have the required documentation to apply, so it could be faster than we thought.

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coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the letter is weak and does not follow a clear and concise format typically expected in a formal letter. Organize the content with an introduction, body, and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
A suitable greeting is important, but 'Good morning, Ammy!' is informal for a job-related letter. Consider using titles and last names, e.g., 'Dear Mr. Smith,' followed by a more formal closing like 'Kind regards' or 'Sincerely'.
coherence cohesion
Focus on presenting one idea per paragraph while ensuring it's relevant to the job application context. This letter mixes immigration consultation with the job process, which can be confusing.
task achievement
A complete response to the task would be a letter that directly addresses the job offer, describes your qualifications, expresses your interest in the position, and requests a formal application or interview process.
task achievement
The tone of the letter should be formal and professional when applying for a job. Avoid casual language and ensure the focus is on your application, using appropriate and respectful language to convey your message.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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