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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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Grange
Park
 in its past form in 1920 and its current expansion.
Overall
, there are extensive developments with regard to the centre of the
park
.
It is clear that
 the plan was to extend the facilities and attractions of the area. There were no plans to change the main entrances in both north and south of the
park
.
According to
 the maps, the most noticeable change from the previous plan to the existing plan is that there is no longer a fountain
as well as
 a glasshouse when the redesigning work has been done. The musician's stage is replaced by an enormous amphitheatre for concerts in the western part of the
park
.
Also
, the two rose garden in the northeast and the southwest of the area is replaced by a square one in the very heart of the
park
along with
 the four row of seats all around that
instead
 of five separate seat sections. A stunning water feature is created in the southeast of the
park
.
This
 is achieved by demolishing the glasshouse.
In addition
, an area for children's play
along with
 a beautiful cafe on the left side of it is constructed. despite the two entrances at the top and bottom of the
park
, an entrance for reaching the underground car
park
 has been built.
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