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The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.

The graph below shows the sales of children’s books, adult fiction and educational books between 2002 and 2006 in one country.
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The line graph illustrates the
sales
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 of 3 different types of
books
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 throughout the period from 2002 to 2006 in one specific country.
Overall
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, the
sales
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 of children's
books
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 and educational
books
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 increased whilst adult fiction saw a decrease.
To begin
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 with, the
sales
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 of
books
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 for children started at around 33
million
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 in 2002,
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 rose gradually, and in 2006
this
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 rate accounted for approximately 55
million
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 dollars. In terms of educational
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, it started at around 25
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 and increased moderately to just above 30
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 till 2003, before dropping to
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 initial rate in 2005,
however
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, in 2006 it constituted at around 32
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 dollars of
sales
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. Adult fiction
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books
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book
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sales
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 began at 45
million
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 and fell with some fluctuations
then
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 it's
sales
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 comprised 30
million
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 dollars.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, books, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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