The chart and table below give information about tourists at a particular holiday resort in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart and table below illustrate information about tourists who come from several continents who spent nights at some holiday resort in Australia.
Overall
, it is clearly seen that people
in Europe are the tourists with the longest day of stay, while
Asian people
, mostly stay for just a week.
To begin
with, European tourists spend more than 2 weeks or precisely 16 days in Australia, most of them love to go camping and then
go to the beach to swim or sunbathing
. The next position is American folks, they usually spend two weeks in a 4-star hotel and sightseeing through the area. Wrong verb form
sunbathe
Moreover
, international people
from other regions usually take 10 days, and they are into camping with the most beloved activity being surfing.
On the other hand
, the Asian community only spent a week in the resort, but they tend to choose 5-star hotels for holidays, and their main activity is travel, the same as American people
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