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Task 1. The picture below shows the differences in the layout of the conference centre

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The maps illustrate how the conference
centre
 is expected to change after certain developments in a period of 15 years starting from 2010.
Overall
, as can be seen from the picture, the conference
centre
 is predicted to witness significant changes during the time frame. The most significant improvement will be the construction of the residence
hall
 and several
rooms
 serving different purposes. In 2010, there was a big
garden
 on the right side of the
centre
, and a car park right next to it. In the middle of the map, there was another
garden
 with a reception
on
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in
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 the top left-hand corner and a
hall
 above it. There were two
rooms
 on the left part of the map and the space under those was empty. In 2015, the carpark is expected to be enlarged, taking
place
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 of the
garden
 on its right side.
In addition
, a residence
hall
 with 20
rooms
 will be built on the top of the car park, next to the
hall
 which is predicted to remain unchanged. Regarding the change in the middle of the map, the
garden
 will be reduced in size to provide space for the erection of new
rooms
. There will be two meeting
rooms
, a game room and a music room
at
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this
 area.
In
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On
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 the western side,
while
 the
rooms
 on top are anticipated to remain the same, an IT
centre
 and a canteen and kitchen will be built in the empty space at the bottom.
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