Homeless is increasing in many major cities around the world
The number of
people
suffer
Wrong verb form
suffering
by
homelessness Change preposition
from
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
upward
trend in many big cities Add an article
an upward
world-wide
. There are a variety of forces that drive Correct your spelling
worldwide
this
trend and several solutions should be adopted to solve the thorny issues which have arisen.
There are many reasons why homelessness is always increase
. Unemployment might be Change the verb form
is always increasing
is
one of Unnecessary verb
apply
main
Change the article
the main
factor
that should Fix the agreement mistake
factors
response
to these issues. Nowadays, Replace the word
respond
people
are hard to find a job due to
so many requirements they should provide such
companies Correct quantifier usage
apply
are limiting
the age for hiring Wrong verb form
limit
employee
or even unsuitable job, Add an article
an employee
the
demand for Correct word choice
and the
data
scientist are popular but none for the Add an article
a data
laborers
. Change the spelling
labourers
Secondly
, natural disaster such
earthquakes
, flooding, and tornado Change preposition
as earthquakes
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
causes a lot of building in this
case houses are damaged and people
are
hard to build their own house so they prefer to move to another place to look for a new chance but it ends Verb problem
find it
unexpected
.
In terms of how to tackle these problems, government are the one that we rely on. Many regulations and policies are possible to set as a high priority. Change the adjective
unexpectedly
Firstly
, providing the number of homeless shelters that can accommodate all the roofless. Secondly
, serving some training that can help them to improve their abilities and skills such
as business, computer, communication and so on. Moreover
, they can also
make some regulations to
many industries for opening or hiring a particular job for these special Change preposition
for
people
in order to get operating access.
In conclusion, it is clear that
there are various reasons for this
trend, however
, building roofless shelter
, providing some courses, and sending them into Fix the agreement mistake
shelters
industry
are the steps Add an article
the industry
need
to be taken to tackle these issuesCorrect pronoun usage
that need
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