Homeless is increasing in many major cities around the world

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The number of

people

suffer

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suffering

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from

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homelessness

show

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upward

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an upward

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trend in many big cities

world-wide

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worldwide

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. There are a variety of forces that drive

this

trend and several solutions should be adopted to solve the thorny issues which have arisen. There are many reasons why homelessness

is always increase

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is always increasing

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. Unemployment might be

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one of

main

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factor

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factors

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that should

response

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to these issues. Nowadays,

people

are hard to find a job

due to

so many requirements they should provide

such

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apply

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companies

are limiting

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limit

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the age for hiring

employee

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an employee

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or even unsuitable job,

the

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demand for

data

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a data

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scientist are popular but none for the

laborers

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labourers

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Secondly

, natural disaster

such

earthquakes

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as earthquakes

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, flooding, and tornado

are

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also

causes a lot of building in

this

case houses are damaged and

people

are

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find it

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hard to build their own house so they prefer to move to another place to look for a new chance but it ends

unexpected

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. In terms of how to tackle these problems, government are the one that we rely on. Many regulations and policies are possible to set as a high priority.

Firstly

, providing the number of homeless shelters that can accommodate all the roofless.

Secondly

, serving some training that can help them to improve their abilities and skills

such

as business, computer, communication and so on.

Moreover

, they can

also

make some regulations

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many industries for opening or hiring a particular job for these special

people

in order to get operating access. In conclusion,

it is clear that

there are various reasons for

this

trend,

however

, building roofless

shelter

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shelters

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, providing some courses, and sending them into

industry

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the industry

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are the steps

need

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that need

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to be taken to tackle these issues

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coherence cohesion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

277 words

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