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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The two maps illustrate the changes considered for developing the southwest
airport
in
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next year and show the differences of it with
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existent
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 site.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
airport
 will expand both in size and facilities. Ten gates will be added
besides
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considering some extra recreation areas and accommodations. In
present
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the present
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airport
, there are eight available gates that will increase to eighteen in
new
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the new
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 plan
also
 they are going to consider two doors for each entrance
instead
 of one. Another significant change is adding a car hire part in the bottom right-hand corner of the site and an ATM next to it which would be beneficial for passengers. What is more, some places in the departure part are likely to relocate
such
 as
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 area and café
also
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 a new café will be built next to the ATM near the passport control customs.
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,
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the walk
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walk way
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 will transform to
sky
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a sky
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 train on the top of the
airport
.
Therefore
,
it is clear that
 the
southwest
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airport
 will witness spectacular developments in
coming
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the coming
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 year.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure clear paragraphing, establishing a logical flow from the introduction through the main body to the conclusion. Use a wider range of cohesive devices to enhance the links between ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Expand the introduction and conclusion to more effectively encapsulate the main points of the essay, setting up the topic and summarizing the primary findings respectively.
coherence cohesion
Support main points with more detailed development, and make fuller use of the information given in the prompt. Integrate illustrative examples more effectively to enrich the comparison.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, ensure that all parts of the prompt are addressed equally and fully. This might involve elaborating on how the features will change and the relative importance of these changes.
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Express ideas more comprehensively, ensuring that comparisons are thorough and presenting a balanced overview of the current and future states of the airport.
task achievement
Incorporate more relevant and specific examples to support your points, refer closely to the map details to validate the comparisons made between the current airport layout and its projected redevelopment.

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