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Some people believe that travelling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable that taking trips
is lead
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leads
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 to learning new
culture
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cultures
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 and improving useful skills. Meanwhile, some people believe that it
cost
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 a lot and takes
much
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a lot of
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time
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both of view and their
pespectives
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perspectives
perspective
. On the one hand,
public
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a public
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 that takes a
lot
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touristic
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tourist
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 trips
have
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 more personalities. Because they meet
another individuals
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another individual
other individuals
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 with different
culture
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cultures
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 and
language
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languages
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 from their own. They can learn more about their culture and about their country by speaking with them.
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, language skills
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is
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 an essential part of our life will
develope
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develop
.
On the other hand
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, no doubt that currently
traveling
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travelling
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 abroad will take a lot of money and
time
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. Payment for plane tickets,
accomidation
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accommodation
, transport, and food can be
big
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a big
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 problem. The
time
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 that waist at
time
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 of flying and on
another
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other
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 transport takes more part of your journey.
Such
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 as, overseas
fly
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flights
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 take more than 10 hours.
To sum up
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 all mentioned, I
become
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have come
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 to the conclusion that travelling is
valuable
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a valuable
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 experience that will develop communication skills and cultural knowledge of
the
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apply
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other countries.

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coherence cohesion
It is crucial to ensure your essay maintains a clear, logical structure. Your introduction should succinctly present the topic and preview the main points you will discuss without expressing your opinion too early. Each body paragraph should contain one main idea with clear explanations, followed by a relevant example. Ensure your conclusion summarises the discussion and states your opinion clearly, without introducing new arguments.
task achievement
To improve task achievement, it's important to fully address all parts of the task. Make sure to discuss both views presented in the prompt and elaborate on them with specific examples. After discussing both sides, clearly state your own opinion and support it with convincing reasons or evidence. Avoid sweeping statements without support, and strive for depth and development in your argumentation.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens horizons
  • cultural exposure
  • tolerance
  • self-reliance
  • overcoming challenges
  • language proficiency
  • sustainable tourism
  • environmental footprint
  • cultural homogenization
  • commercialization
  • responsible travel
  • global understanding
  • eco-friendly practices
  • accessible alternatives
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