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You are preparing an event in the countryside. Write a letter to your friend and ask for help with the arrangements. What the event is. Why the event is being held? What arrangements have already been made? How your friend can help?

#event #countryside #friend #arrangements
Hi David, I am writing an invitation
of
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 my sister's wedding in my home town. When my sister's marriage
has been
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was
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 fixed my family and I
are so much
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were very
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 busy.
Besides
this
, we have
short
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a short
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 time for
preparation
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the preparation
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 of
this
 function.
However
,
to organize
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organising
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this
 event is our family tradition and almost every couple before marriage we celebrate
bachelor
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the bachelor
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 party.
Although
, you would remember that
on
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at
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 my wedding I organised as well. The decorations
of
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for
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party
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the party
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has
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are
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 almost done but two things are still pending now. If you remember that you had hired the musical band and photographer on my day
so
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I would request you to please call them again. At that time the string band had performed
fantastic
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 and everyone enjoyed
much
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it much
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.
Moreover
, the pictures he captured
was
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 awesome and when I saw my photos it
goes
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got
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 nostalgic. If you contact those
peoples
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people
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so
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we will have a chance to enjoy
this
 moment again. I am looking forward to hearing back as soon as possible. Warm wishes
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greeting and closing
Begin your letter with a proper greeting and end with an appropriate closing statement to improve clarity.
single idea per paragraph
Ensure each paragraph presents a clear idea. Combine the sentences related to past experiences with the band and photographer into a single paragraph for better coherence.
complete response
Clearly state what event you are organizing at the beginning of your letter. Provide explicit details about the nature of the event, why it's being held, and what has been arranged so far.
suitable writing tone
Maintain a tone that is consistent with writing to a friend. Avoid overly formal language or phrases that may not suit the context of a personal correspondence.
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