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The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars ($). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar graph above shows average earnings in the Republic of Ireland in 5 different years, with projections for the future. Earnings are in US dollars ($). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart illustrates statistics of the salary in the Republic of Ireland in different years from 1968 to 2018 with future
estimate
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estimates
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. The
wages
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wage
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currancy
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currency
are
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is
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 in United
State
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 dollars.
Overall
, the salary increased every year
whereas
 it
got
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decresead
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decreased
 a little
one
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in one
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 year only but exceptionally
level
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levelled
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 up in
next
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the next
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 year.
Which
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This
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 shows in the future it
would
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raising
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rise
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. The wages
was
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 near
to
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apply
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$7000 in 1968 which got up
$
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10000
with in
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within
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 a decade.
At
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In
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 the same way after ten years, it
is
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was
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 extended
$
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to $
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13000 in 1988, in Ireland.
Moreover
, within
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the next
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next
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the next
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 ten years
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it
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its
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it
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 expanded
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by $
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$
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by $
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15000 in 1998 which
demostrate
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demonstrate
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earnings
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earning
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earnings
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 constantly
inreased
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increased
. In 2008 it got down from $15000 to $14000 which did not
satayed
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stay
 the same in 2018. The payments
dramically
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dramatically
 extended
approximatelly
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approximately
 $20000 in 2018.
However
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 it is expected that the future Ireland's revenue will
constanly
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constantly
expend
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expand
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.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuations
  • projections
  • steady increase
  • decline
  • significant peak
  • drop
  • trends
  • comparison
  • growth
  • external factors
  • historical events
  • measurements
  • average earnings
  • US dollars ($)
  • Republic of Ireland
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