The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram illustrates how
sugar
is manufactured from
sugarcane
.
Overall
, the process of making
sugar
consists of 7 steps with 3 major steps namely farming, separating, and drying.
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the beginning of
farming
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process,
sugarcane
needs to be planted and it will take between 12 to 18 months until it is ready to be harvested. There
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two ways to harvest it, either manually pick it up by hand or using a specially designed tractor to pick up the
sugarcane
. The next process step is to separate its juice from
sugarcane
by crushing it into a machine. Afterwards,
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filter is used to purify the juice. The drying procedure starts with cooking the juice in
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high heat temperature to turn it into a syrup.
Subsequently
, a
sugar
crystal will be separated from the syrup using a centrifuge. In the end, the
sugar
will
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to be dry and cool first before used.
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