The diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The diagram illustrates how
sugar
is manufactured from sugarcane
. Overall
, the process of making sugar
consists of 7 steps with 3 major steps namely farming, separating, and drying.
In
the beginning of Change the preposition
At
farming
process, Add an article
the farming
sugarcane
needs to be planted and it will take between 12 to 18 months until it is ready to be harvested. There is
two ways to harvest it, either manually pick it up by hand or using a specially designed tractor to pick up the Change the verb form
are
sugarcane
. The next process step is to separate its juice from sugarcane
by crushing it into a machine. Afterwards, limestone
filter is used to purify the juice.
The drying procedure starts with cooking the juice in Correct article usage
a limestone
the
high heat temperature to turn it into a syrup. Correct article usage
a
Subsequently
, a sugar
crystal will be separated from the syrup using a centrifuge. In the end, the sugar
will needed
to be dry and cool first before used.Wrong verb form
need
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