The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002.
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The chart provides information about the
overall
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number
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of minutes of mobile phone calls in
the
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Great Britain, divided into three categories
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such
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as Local-fixed
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, National and international-fixed
line
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,
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and Mobiles
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Mobiles
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mobile
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(all calls), between 1995
to
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and
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2002. It can be seen that
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line
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had a considerable rise from 1995 to 1999, followed by a slight decrease from 90 to 74.
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, the Local-fixed
line
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had the highest
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number of calls
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among all other categories.
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, the total
number
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of minutes was equal to 78 in 1996 and 2001.
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the other hand, both
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National and
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International
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line
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lines
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and Mobiles(all calls) experienced
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significant growth in the
last
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years. The
overall
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number
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of minutes increased by 36 from 55 to 61 in National-International
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fixed-line
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line
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telephone calls.
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, Mobiles(all calls)
used
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are used
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much less than
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the National-International-fixed
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National-International-fixed
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line
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. The
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of
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was 45
whereas
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the quantity of
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the latter
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was equal to 62.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, line with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number
  • minutes
  • telephone calls
  • UK
  • divided into
  • categories
  • from
  • to
  • overall
  • increased significantly
  • local fixed-line calls
  • accounted for
  • largest proportion
  • throughout
  • period
  • international calls
  • highest rate of growth
  • experiencing
  • sharp increase
  • national long-distance calls
  • remained relatively stable
  • slight decline
  • towards
  • end
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