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the graph brlow shows the number of short term visitors to australia from 4 diffrent countries from 2010 to 2017 . summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurs , and make comparision where relevant ,

the graph brlow shows the number of short term visitors to australia from 4 diffrent countries from 2010 to 2017 . summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main featurs , and make comparision where relevant ,
#brlow #term #visitors #australia #diffrent #countries #information #featurs #comparision
the graph
illutrates
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illustrates
 the number of
short
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short-term
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term
visitors
 to
australia
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Australia
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 we have
japan
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Japan
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 and
china
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China
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 and new zealand and
USA
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the USA
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 between 2010 and 2017.
Overall
, as evident that
two
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contries
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countries
 new zealand and
USA
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the USA
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 was the highest
short
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term
visitors
 to
australia
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Australia
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 between 2010 and 2013, On
other
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the other
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 hand japan and
china
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China
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was have
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 the lowest
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number of short
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short
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short-term
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term
visitors
 to
australia
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Australia
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 between 2010 and 2013.
In contrast
,
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term
visitors
 from
USA
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the USA
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 to
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Australia
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australia
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Australia
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 fluctuation from 2010 to 2017, but there
is
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was
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slight
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a slight
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 increase in 2015 and 2016 and 2017,
while
japan
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Japan
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 arrivals
stay
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stayed
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in
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at
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stable
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a stable
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 rate between 200,000 and 400,000 from 2010 to 2017 with no raising, The biggest
diffrent
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difference
different
 all over the years was
china
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China
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visitors
reach
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reached
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to appromixtaly
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approximately
 more than 1400,00 arrivals in 2017. New
zeland
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Zeland
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 was the majority
visitors
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of visitors
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 to
australia
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Australia
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 between 2010 to 2017
..
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.
...
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