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Some people believe that hardened criminals should be sentenced to death. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#people #criminals #death
Generally,
due to
 increased interconnectedness, the information about an increasing number of crimes with a wide range of variety can easily be accessed, which
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used to be behind the curtains in the past.
Thus
, one can come
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to the conclusion that we are in the middle of the crime wave and
criminals
 are being hardened, and to put justice into
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practice,
death
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 penalty should be applied. I strongly disagree with
this
 belief with respect to two main reasons.
Firstly
,
imposition
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 of a
death
 sentence is inhumane regardless of the case and may not address the increasing rates of hardened crimes in a sustainable manner. To be more precise, hardened
criminals
 are mainly the ones that are suffering from psychological disorders,
therefore
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 is out
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 control.
Additionally
 ,
death
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the death
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 sentence is the type of punishment that cannot be reversed if a criminal is
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 to be guiltless.
Although
 serving in
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prison for years is nonreversible as well, one can be reintegrated back
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the
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society after being released, but the ones that
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 with
death
 have no chance for that.
However
, hardened
criminals
 can be prevented without bearing
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 challenges. That means prevention of hardened
criminals
 can be applied through public awareness, social work and affordable psychological support for
the ones
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those
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 who are facing self-control issues. With respect to the reintegration of prisoners back
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society, having workplaces for them, being open to admitting them and stimulating their rehabilitation individually
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 essential.
To sum up
, in order to prevent an increasing number of hardened
criminals
, both governmental and non-governmental organizations should collaborate, which can be done by increasing public awareness, addressing
psychological
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 issues of the people and
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 them with iteration.
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Present a balanced argument for or against the death penalty with clear reasons supporting your position. Expand on the examples to strengthen your argument and give concrete evidence.

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