The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words
Two pie charts compare the rationales of immigration to and emigration from the UK in 2007, measured in percentages.
Overall
, working purposes had the lion's
shares
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in both categories,
while
the lowest
proportions
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proportion
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of reasons for emigration was formal study and no reason stated for immigration.
To begin
with, 30% of the total population moved to the country because of their jobs, followed by studying purposes with a mere 4%
from
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that number.
Subsequently
, half of the individuals who came for job purposes were in fact migrated to the UK to join their companions.
Moreover
,
jobseekers
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and unspecified reasons accounted for 12% and 11% respectively. Other than that, people moved to said nation without any reason
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for only half of the jobseekers' ratio.
On the other hand
, the former habitats of the UK who moved out from the country
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also
for the sake of their careers with a mere 1%
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workers who migrated to the area. Afterwards, 22% of the total population were people who travelled outside the region to find jobs and 18% of the total had no specific rationale, followed by
other
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others
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with a 4% difference from jobseekers, and
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reasons with a mere 1% from unspecified aims.
Lastly
, studying abroad was the least reason with only 4% of the total population.
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