Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
the given map
depict
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depicts
the
information about the locations of Correct article usage
apply
new
mall for shopping which was decided by Add an article
the new
a new
city
of Add an article
the city
Correct your spelling
Bradfield
brand field
brandfield
after the analysis, it is clearly stated that area s1, housing state, Change the capitalization
Brandfield
city
centre and
golf course and park all these places are closely related. the location for Correct word choice
apply
estate
of housing Add an article
the estate
are
on the upward direction Change the verb form
is
while
the downtown remained bottom. the golf park toward west
of Add an article
the west
city
of Add an article
the city
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Bradfield
brand field
brandfield
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Brandfield
moreover
, the river and railway track are cutting off each other close to city
centre
Add an article
the city
furthermore
, for location s2 where majority
of land is barren. the industrial factories and roads are opposite to each other Add an article
the majority
a majority
next,
the road has access to two ways one is reaching
to housing estate and Wrong verb form
reaches
other
Correct article usage
the other
reaching to
factories
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reaches
overall
, it is vividly manifested that area s1 has been the
congested by town and Correct article usage
apply
and
housing but site s2 has more land and will be beneficial to construct Remove the redundancy
apply
new
shopping mallAdd an article
a new
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