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Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Below is a map of the city of Brandfield. City planners have decided to build a new shopping mall for the area, and two sites, S1 and S2 have been proposed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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the given map
depict
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the
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information about the locations of
new
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the new
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 mall for shopping which was decided by
city
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the city
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 of
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Bradfield
brand field
brandfield
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Brandfield
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 after the analysis, it is clearly stated that area s1, housing state,
city
 centre
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golf course and park all these places are closely related. the location for
estate
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the estate
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 of housing
are
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 on the upward direction
while
 the downtown remained bottom. the golf park toward
west
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the west
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 of
city
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the city
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 of
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Bradfield
brand field
brandfield
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Brandfield
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moreover
, the river and railway track are cutting off each other close to
city
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the city
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 centre
furthermore
, for location s2 where
majority
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the majority
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 of land is barren. the industrial factories and roads are opposite to each other
next,
the road has access to two ways one
is reaching
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 to housing estate and
other
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the other
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reaching to
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 factories
overall
, it is vividly manifested that area s1 has been
the
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congested by town and
and
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housing but site s2 has more land and will be beneficial to construct
new
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a new
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 shopping mall
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • proximity
  • residential area
  • industrial zone
  • city center
  • main road
  • benefits
  • convenience
  • traffic congestion
  • accessibility
  • workers
  • compare
  • differences
  • pros and cons
  • suitable
  • analysis
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