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The map shows the center of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.

The map shows the center of Paris. A company wants to open a new restaurant in the area. The map shows two possible locations for the restaurant.
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The
center
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centre
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 of
Paris
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the Paris
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 map illustrates two potential places for a restaurant. In
this
essay
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 we will make a comparison between the north and south of
Paris
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the Paris
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 area to find which is the better one.
Location
 1 is on the North Bank, between Westminster Underground Station and 10 Downins
street
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 with
nearby
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the nearby
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 office.
This
location
 is opposite the London Eye
with
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 the same distance from
the
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apply
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Westminster Bridge and
Jubille
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Jubilee
 Bridge.
Location
 1 would be good for the 2000
worker
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workers
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 who work at 10
downing street
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Downing Street
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 and
nearby
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the nearby
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 office from Monday to Friday.
Additionaly
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, there would
also
200
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be 200
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 customers from Big Ben
towar
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Towers
everyday
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,
Location
 2 is on the south bank of the river
thames
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Thames
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, between the London Eye and the
sealife
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Sealife
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 London Aquarium.
This
 play
near
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is near
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 the east of
park
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the park
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. The advantage of setting up shop here for sandwiches
are
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is
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 that it attracts 13,000 visitors from well-known tourist destination
everyday
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. These customers could stroll to
as
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a
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neighboring
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neighbouring
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pakr
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park
 or go along the river to eat.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words location with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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