You would like to invite your friend from abroad to a public event in your country. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter describe the public event explain why you think he/she would like the event write how you can help your friend with accommodation

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Dear

Saimon

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Simon

, Hope you are in radiant health and the best of spirits. I am writing

this

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letter to invite you

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a public

event

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in Bangladesh. The Pohela Boishakh is one of the most important

festival

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festivals

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which is going to be celebrated on 15th

April

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of April

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this

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year. The main theme of

this

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festival is to uphold the

bangali

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Bangali

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culture and

peoples

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people

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are used to

enjoy

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enjoying

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this

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festival with

joyous

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a joyous

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mood

accross

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across

the country. I think you would like the

event

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for many reasons. First and foremost, men and

womens

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women

women's

wear traditional clothes like panjabi and shari respectively.

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, people

tastes

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taste

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traditional food like "Panta Bath" which is served with rice, hilsha fish,

smash

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smashed

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potato etcetera.

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muscial

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musical

programs would be arranged where popular

singer

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singers

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and bands will be performed

with

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apply

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primitive

Bangali

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Bengali

song

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songs

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. I firmly

beleive

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believe

that you will be enjoying

this

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public

event

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. Please come and join us in one week advance.

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, share your itinerary so that I can arrange your accommodation with all required amenities with a view to

make

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making

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your journey comfortable and memorable. I hope to see you soon in

this

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upcoming public

event

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. Yours lovingly, Faisal

Submitted by faisalmahamood on Sun Nov 26 2023

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Coherence and Cohesion

Ensure consistent verb tense throughout the letter for higher coherence.

Coherence and Cohesion

Paragraphs could have more clear topic sentences to better introduce each idea.

Coherence and Cohesion

Try to use a variety of linking words to connect your ideas more smoothly.

Task Response

Include more details about how you can help with accommodation, as the task requires a specific explanation.

Legibility and Accuracy

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
1
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
19
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

196 words

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