The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malasia in the year 2010

The pie chart below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malasia in the year 2010
The pie chart illustrates Japanese and Malaysian 5 distinct household types in per cent in the year 2010.
Overall
, 2 out of 5 expenditures named housing and transport had big differences from each other. Meanwhile, other facilities in 2 countries had a similar level. In
Malaysia
other goods and services
presenting
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just over
the
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quarter of all items,
that
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is less
for
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3%
from
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Japan
that
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count 29%.
Also
, the same count of difference was in health care.
Where
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Japan
account
6
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% and
Malaysia
3% which was
lowest
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of the year.
However
,
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of food little bit varied, Malaysian accounted
27
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% and Japanese 24%. The usage of transport in
Japan
presents 20% which is a fifth of all environments. They are 2 times more than the users of the vehicle from
Malaysia
which
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only 10%. The subscriber of housing in
Malaysia
is the biggest one in both
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countries. They count 34% more than
Japan
at 13%.
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Vocabulary: The word "differences" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • household expenditures
  • average
  • pie chart
  • proportion
  • income
  • spending habits
  • cultural differences
  • economic differences
  • expenditure categories
  • priorities
  • lifestyle
  • income levels
  • cost of living
  • government policies
  • trends
  • globalization
  • imported goods
  • local products
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