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The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.

The graph below gives information about the number of Catholics residing in different nations.
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The bar chart depicts how many
Catholics
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 lived in China, India, Philippines, Vietnam, Korea and
Japan
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 between 2010 and 2013.
Overall
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, these two years Philippines
show
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the maximum number of
Catholics
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 and
Japan
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are
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the lowest Christians living among these nations. In 2010, most of the
Catholics
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 were living in the Phillippines about 75,940,000.
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Japan
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 a minimal value of
Catholics
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 lived in 2010. It is about 400,000. Vietnam and Korea are a slightly similar amount of
Catholics
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. They are 5,590,000 and 5,270,000 respectively. After three years, in 2013 Phillippines had the highest value of
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. It is about 72,000,000, but
this
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 amount is slightly less than the Phillippines in 2010.
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, China and India
become
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 the maximum
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Catholics
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number of Catholics
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 in 2013. It is about 15,000,000 and 19,000,000 orderly.
That is
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 a considerable value of
Catholics
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 residing in these countries.
However
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, over these two years, the spread of
Catholics
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 in Vietnam and
Japan
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 did not show a considerable amount.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words catholics, japan with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "considerable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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