the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 200 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 200 years ago and how it looks now. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the development of
central
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the central
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library
throughout
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20 years. Evidently, it has been
remodeled
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to a large extent and some spaces and facilities have been provided as well, making the
library
more attractive to visitors. Before updating, to the left side of the
entrance
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a reading
room
with newspapers and magazines was placed and to the right, there was an enquiry desk that was in charge of tickets and book returns. Two decades later,
however
, both sections have been replaced with
computer
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room
and café respectively.
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In
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To
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the central area of the
room
, there are no longer tables and chairs and
also
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adult fiction
books
on the left have been transferred to the opposite side where an information desk and self-service machines are provided in the replacement of adult non-fiction
books
. Reference
books
,
also
, have their own places on the left-middle space of the
library
. At the back corners of the
library
, there was a
room
with CDs, videos and computer games on the left, which has been enlarged and now houses Children’s fiction
books
.
Moreover
, it has two sofas so that visitors can enjoy storytelling events that are held there. there is
also
a lecture
room
on the
right-side
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right-hand
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corner where
children
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children's
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books
used to be.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words library, room, books with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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