The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.

The pie charts below show the comparison of exports in Great Britain over five years.
The pie charts compare the export of different products in Great Britain from 2010 to 2015.
Overall
, machinery was the most popular field over these years.
whereas
organic chemicals were the least.
Moreover
, the
propotion
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proportion
of each sector was increasing during
this
period, apart from pharmaceuticals.
To begin
, in 2010, the proportion for machinery was 29%, increasing to 30% in 2015, accounting for the highest proportion in the chart. Following that, 29% of vehicles were exported at the start of the period, slightly reaching
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30%
at the end
., accounting for the second most preferred product to send abroad.
On the other hand
,
initially
only 7% of machinery was sent to other countries in 2005, followed by 10% in 2010.
Similarly
, plastics were
also
not favoured at the beginning, at 9%, but
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to 13%
at the end
. Even though
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pharmaceuticals had 27% in the beginning,
this
had dropped to 18% (in 2010).
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