In
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era,
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smartphones
has become
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problem
due to
contant-updateCorrect your spelling
content-update
constant-update
features and apps. That affects some
children
spending too many hours on their
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. If
that is
the case, I think the advancement of technology, mainly on
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is already being directed to negative development rather than positive one.
Childhood
time
is a phase when
children
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their
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personalityFix the agreement mistake
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, and
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social skills in order to adapt in later development. Being exposed too much
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smartphones
will cause less
time
ofChange preposition
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learning and less
time
with their
parents
and friends. Ironically, when
children
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something interesting
such
as a game app, they do not want to play outside anymore and prefer to stay at home. If
this
is being abandoned, not only they will have less
time
to explore, but
also
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in society.
Furthermore
, there is
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that having
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too many hours on
smartphones
will make
children
unable to focus during their development in school. Because their attention is already being hijacked by
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scenario is they become addicts. If that scenario really happens,
children
will not perform well in school and it results their low grades in assignments and examinations.
Therefore
, it has already become
parents
' responsibility to teach
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children
how to use their gadgets wisely without
something important.
Moreover
,
parents
should give specific allocation for everyday usage of
smartphones
to avoid their
children
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addicted.
In conclusion, spending many hours
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smartphones
for
children
not only
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them
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less
time
with
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and friends
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but
also
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can hinder
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school performance.