Nowadays we have become a throwaway society with where it is common to throw away devices and gadgets instead of repairing them. Why is this happening and what are the effects of this?

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day and age, whilst some people advocate that purchasing new devices are more valuable than fixing

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because of the decreased cost of the

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strategy, others assert the opposite direction.

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, that customer attitude will negatively

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society and decrease its ability to

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, and some regulations can fix

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lines with high

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if it comes to cost

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means that when end-users

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their outcomes from

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consumerism behaviour they apparently deal with it.

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, Adidas company revealed that the booming discounted

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for their products were achieved by its

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service.

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can adjust the process and make sense because it can

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sales rate for the taxed gadgets.

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a negative effect, but sometimes it

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the market balance. In conclusion,

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on the marketplace. I believe that adding some

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taxes can control the overconsumption lifestyle.

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1Word repetition
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4 paragraphs

261 words

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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