Nowadays we have become a throwaway society with where it is common to throw away devices and gadgets instead of repairing them. Why is this happening and what are the effects of this?

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because of the decreased cost of the
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, that customer attitude will negatively
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society and decrease its ability to
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lines with high
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customer
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consumerism behaviour they apparently deal with it.
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, Adidas company revealed that the booming discounted
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for their products were achieved by its
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service.
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, not only the advanced
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technologies have lessened the total cost of products , but
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they have upgraded the customer
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can adjust the process and make sense because it can
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, adding high taxes
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these products will
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definitely control
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attitude.
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, the Egyptian commercial chamber said that there is
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sales rate for the taxed gadgets.
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obligatory taxes
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the product not always
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a negative effect, but sometimes it
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the market balance. In conclusion,
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has a myriad of positive
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on the marketplace. I believe that adding some
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taxes can control the overconsumption lifestyle.
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