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Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; others believe only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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It is widely believed that governments and companies can make big impacts to improve the
environment
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individuals
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 cannot do anything to change. Personally, I can neither completely disagree nor agree with
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 statement for a variety of reasons. I partly agree that governments and corporations can make a difference. One of the main reasons can be that governments can build public transportation and encourage people to use it.
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 means that by applying encouragement, the percentage of air pollution can be decreased by using fewer gas vehicles. Large companies
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 have a good impact on the
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 by applying technology, funds and human resources in producing products.
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, Tesla has successfully produced electric cars with the idea of replacing traditional cars driven by gas and oil.
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, I disagree with the viewpoint that
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 can do nothing to improve the
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.
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, an individual cannot make a change but it is possible with
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.
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 is because many people with similar mindsets can do the same work to make a big impact. For exampleJapan is known as a clean country because many Japanese keep their surroundings clean by picking rubbish and keep cities clean.
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, energy can be saved in a good way if
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 use it effectively.
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, turning off equipment if not used. In conclusion, the
environment
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 can be made different by both authorities, large companies and
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. In my opinion, the important is how we educate everyone to be attentive to the surroundings and to maintain it in good conditions

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introduction and conclusion
Ensure that the introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance on it to immediately guide the reader. The conclusion should effectively summarize your main points and restate your position.
paragraph structure
Organize ideas logically, using clear paragraphing with topic sentences that introduce the central idea of each paragraph followed by supporting details.
linking and sentence structure
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task response
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supporting examples
Support your main points with relevant and specific examples. While personal examples are acceptable, including a wider range of examples can strengthen your argument.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • environmental awareness
  • sustainable practices
  • renewable energy
  • carbon footprint
  • waste reduction
  • conservation
  • ecosystem
  • pollution
  • climate change
  • responsibility
  • leadership
  • legislation
  • investment
  • collaboration
  • systemic change
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