Rich countries should allow jobs for skilled and knowledgeable employers who are from poor countries. Do you agree or disagree.

Skilled and educated
workers
can get work in developed
nations
,
this
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is quite popular
among
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the world. The first-tier
countries
provide more job opportunities to
workers
who
skilled
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and knowledgeable especially from the three-tier territories. I strongly agree with
this
notion for the following reasons.
To begin
with, at present, developed
countries
should be given
enormous
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the enormous
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amount of work
visa
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visas
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for skilled employers
who
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apply
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from
the
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apply
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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nations
in order
to
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the first level
countries
can use skilled People's talent and knowledge to
improvised
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improve
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their
nation
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welfare
along with
economic resources.
For instance
,
in
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Canada gives more working
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visas
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to the Asian continent who talented and academic scholars.
Therefore
, poor
nations
might be developed by foreign currency.
Moreover
,
this
is the best opportunity for the poor
nations
workers
can get
highest
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amount of earnings
as well as
their
econic
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economic
iconic
lifestyle can be better from
underprevilaged
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underprivileged
to
middle class
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lifestyle.
For example
,
in
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Sri Lanka is
the
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an
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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nations
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nation
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but now many scholars and skilled
workers
can get offer
letter
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letters
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from the developed nation's
company
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companies
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and the embassy provides plenty of working
visa
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visas
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within a short period of time.
Hence
,
this
trend
assist
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both sides
first level
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country
along with
poor
nations
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nations'
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workers
like
win-win
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a win-win
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policy.
To conclude
, skilled and educated people get more working
visa
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visas
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from the richest
nations
in order to poor
countries
worker
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workers
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get better
lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
Then
I strongly agree with
this
statement and
this
trend helps poor
nations
worker undoubtedly.
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