The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart depicts the
number
of males
and females
attending numerous courses at an educational centre, while
the pie chart illustrates the percentage of different age
groups attending these courses in 2009. It is clear from the graphs, that women
are higher in numbers than men except for the sculpture course
.
According to
what is shown, the number
of people attending the drama course
is 30 persons, which consists of 20 females
and 10 males
, and painting has the highest number
of males
among all the courses with about 25 males
and 30 females
. In addition
, sculpture
Correct article usage
the sculpture
course
has the fewest number
of participants
with overall
Change the article
an overall
the overall
number
of 15 persons
, 10 men and 5 Replace the word
people
women
. Whereas
, the language course
has the highest number
of comulative
Correct your spelling
cumulative
participants
, and thus
the highest number
of women
participants
with 40 females
and 20 males
. On the other hand
, 50
or over Correct article usage
the 50
age
group have
the highest percentage with 42%, Correct subject-verb agreement
has
while
under
20 Correct article usage
the under
age
group takes the lowest percentage of the pie. the 20-29, 30-39,and 40-49 takes
11%, 16%, and 26%, respectively.
Correct subject-verb agreement
take
To sum up
, we could say that women
were the highest amongst all of the participants
, except for the sculpturing course
. Furthermore
, the 50 or over age
group took the biggest piece of the pie.Submitted by osama2010b on
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, males, females, age, women, course, participants with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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