Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.

Bar graph below shows the amount of carbon emissions in different countries during three different years.
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The bar chart
illustrate
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the
number
of carbon
emission
that is
produced in six
countries
over the three-time period.
Overall
, during the
three years
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three-year
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period,
USA
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the USA
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had been the largest contributor compared to the other five
countries
along with
Canada that produced the least carbon
emission
.
USA
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The USA
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produced the highest carbon
emission
among the other
countries
. In 1975, the
number
reached 1,200,000 metric
tonnes
and
keep
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kept
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rising until it peaked
to
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at
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1,600,000 metric
tonnes
in 2005. Followed by China
as
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in 1975, they started the
number
at around 300,000 metric
tonnes
however
the production significantly rose to approximately 1,500,000 metric
tonnes
. Among the other four
countries
, Canada was able to control the
emission
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emissions
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as the
number
stayed around 150,000 to around 190,000 metric
tonnes
(1975-2005). The UK, India and Germany
also
followed the trend as their
number
stayed in the range
around
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170,000 - 500,000 metric
tonnes
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, emission, countries, tonnes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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