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In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out about the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

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In recent times, people are becoming more interested in getting more
information
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 about their houses. There has been a rise in the number of valuable items being discovered in ancient houses. People have been made rich
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 the variety of
item
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items
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 that find
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making
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reasearch
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research
 about where they live. Items like vintage
equipments
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equipment
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 or natural resources have been found through
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 pattern.
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, in
romania
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, a man was cultivating his land after learning that gold was
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 harvested in that area. Eventually, a discovery of oil was made
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.
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, in some buildings, there are hidden underground passages the occupants have no idea about until
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accidentally
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 it after thousands of years, if
research
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was
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 done in
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 area, it would have been discovered a long time ago. Conducting pilot studies in places where previous
research
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 has been done can be of benefit.
since
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 there is
information
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 about previous work being done in that area, there can be easy access
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such
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 properties and the
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 about these places can
esily
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easily
 be confirmed by those
making
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 the
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. The internet has allowed for easy access to a wide range of materials regarding
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 topic all over the world. Making
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research
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 online will allow for access to the specific work of interest to the individuals and would give detailed
information
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 on how to carry out the process and what the possible
finds
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findings
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 could be. in conclusion, conducting
resaerch
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research
 in regard can bring about the discovery of new things, and
information
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 about
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 can be accessed online or by conducting pilot studies.

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task achievement
You should ensure that your essay directly addresses the essay prompt. Focus on clarifying 'why' people might be interested in finding out about the history of their houses or buildings and provide specific and direct examples that are relevant to the prompt.
coherence cohesion
Strive to maintain a clear and logical structure throughout your essay. Each paragraph should have a clear topic sentence followed by supporting sentences that expand on that point. Transitions between ideas should be smooth and aid in the overall flow of your essay.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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