The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the total of
women
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and men who attended the evening
courses
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at an adult education centre in the year 2009.
On the other hand
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, the pie chart
also
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shows the ages of the
participants
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that
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who
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participated
the
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in the
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evening
courses
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. Overview, Language was the most popular subject among
women
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participants
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whilst, Painting class was mostly
prefered
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preferred
by male
students
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.
In contrast
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, both genders seem to not
enjoyed
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enjoy
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the sculpture subject.
For
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Of
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the
participants
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' ages,
mostly
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most
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were coming from
age
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aged
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50 or over and those
who
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apply
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aged under 20 were the least joined
courses
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. For the language class, it was mostly joined by
women
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with
total
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a total
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of 40 people. Meanwhile, the male
students
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were only half of it. Painting was mostly enjoyed by the male
students
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with approximately 25 males
joined
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joining
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the course. For the sculpture and drama
courses
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, both
were only have
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only had
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10
of
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apply
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male
students
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while
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for the
women
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, the sculpture was the least
favorite
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favourite
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with approximately only 5
participants
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. For the age, people
with
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apply
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aged 50 or more were more attracted to be a member of an adult education centre. It can be seen that 42% of the
member
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members
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who
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apply
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were aged 50 or more. Meanwhile, the total
of
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apply
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percentage of 30-39 and 40-49 were equal with the percentage of senior members. For
adolescents
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adolescent
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participants
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, it was only 5% of the
member
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members
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who
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apply
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joined
courses
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.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words women, courses, participants, students with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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