The given pie charts provide data about the distribution of school funds in the UK over the period of 20 years from 1981 to 2001.

The given pie charts provide data about the distribution of school funds in the UK over the period of 20 years from 1981 to 2001.
The given pie charts provide data about the distribution of school funds in the UK over the period of 20 years from 1981 to 2001. Evidently, a majority of total money was allocated to the salaries of teachers throughout,
while
insurance accounted for the lowest proportion with a constant rise during these years
in contrast
to other worker's
wage
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that declined constantly. As far as the salary of teachers is concerned, 40
percent
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of
total
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was spent in 1981, which
has been
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increased a decade later, compromising half of the total,
then
fell by 5
percent
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in the
last
decade.
Similarly
, the fund
was
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distributed for
the
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resources like
book
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experienced a
zig zag
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trend, accounting for 15 of every 100, 20 and 9
percent
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in order of years. With 2
percent
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of
total
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in 1981, Insurance was the section with
lowest
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inflow. Despite climbing constantly to 8
percent
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, it held the lowest position during the given decades.
On the contrary
, the share of other
worker's
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salaries was 28
percent
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, the second highest,
at
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the beginning, which dropped to 22 and 15
percent
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in 1991 and 2001 respectively.
AS
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for furniture and equipment, after decreasing from 15 in 1981 to 5
percent
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in 1991, it stood at the second highest position by the end of the
last
decade, with 23 of every 100.
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