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Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students' attidutes are important . Discuss both views and give your opinions .

#people #success #teachers #students #attidutes
Some believe that educational success depends on good
teachers
 and some
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 that
student's
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students'
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 attitudes are important . let us discuss both
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prospective
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perspectives
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 briefly. Good
Teachers
plays
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 a vital role
for
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student's
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students'
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Acheivement
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achievement
.
Xeperienced
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Experienced
Teachers
 have better knowledge to guide a
student
 .
Teachers
 are the role model for
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Students
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. If the teacher has vast knowledge about the subject , they can teach the lessons very well.
Good
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 teacher has the ability to explain
the
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difficult concepts. They will help the
student's
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students
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 to
acheive
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achieve
 their target and make them successful. A good trainer can help us in
studies
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our studies
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as well as
 in our
day to day
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 life . They can motivate
student's
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students
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 for their
acheivements
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achievements
.So
i
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believe
beleive
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believe
 that
education
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education's
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success
sucess
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success
depend
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 on good
teachers
Secondly
 , Education
sucess
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success
depend
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 on the Attitude of
student's
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students
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. The
student
 must know about his or her
individuall
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individual
mind set
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mindset
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. They
mus
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must
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 have their responsibilities .
Student's
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Students
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 should ask doubt to
teachers
 and should be
activie
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active
 in gaining knowledge .A positive attitude in studies ,
curiosity
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and curiosity
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 can improve the
student
's success.
Self- motivated
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Self-motivation
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,discipline and effort can bring a
student
in
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on
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 a successful path . I conclude that the educational success of a
student
depend
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 on both
teachers
 as well as their self attitudes.
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