The bar chart below shows the numbers of men and women attending various evening courses at an adult education centre in the year 2009. The pie chart gives information about the ages of these course participants. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.of
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The bar graph illustrates the numbers of both genders attending several evening
courses
at an adult education centre in 2009, Use synonyms
while
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pie
chart shows the ages of these Correct article usage
the pie
course
participants. The data has been calibrated in terms of percentage.
Use synonyms
Overall
, it is clearly seen that the highest number of women were interested in every evening Linking Words
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courses
except Fix the agreement mistake
course
sculpture
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the sculpture
course
, Use synonyms
whereas
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least
proportion of youngsters Correct article usage
the least
take
Wrong verb form
took
part
in these Use synonyms
courses
.
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According to
the given data, nearly 10 Linking Words
number of
men attend drama Correct quantifier usage
apply
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course
, Fix the agreement mistake
courses
while
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womens
Correct your spelling
women
women's
were
20. Wrong verb form
are
Moreover
, there was a minor difference of just 6 numbers between both the Linking Words
sex
in Fix the agreement mistake
sexes
painting
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the painting
course
. Use synonyms
Therefore
, in sculpture activity males were highly interested as compared with females in the given year. Linking Words
Lastly
, ladies were highly interested in the language Linking Words
course
at an adult education centre.
Moving Use synonyms
further
, the largest percentage of Linking Words
half aged
people take Add a hyphen
half-aged
a
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apply
part
in the classes. Followed by 40 to 49 year old masses. Use synonyms
Furthermore
, Linking Words
least
percentage of youngsters take Correct word choice
the lowest
a
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apply
part
in Use synonyms
the
evening Correct article usage
apply
courses
. Use synonyms
Moreover
, 16 per cent of 30 to 39 aged individuals take Linking Words
a
Correct article usage
apply
part
in several activities.Use synonyms
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